We had started our day early, up at six, we got the kids
ready and we were off to Bangor. We planned our trip carefully, when you have
to travel an hour and a half to go shopping, you better plan carefully. We had
a list of stores to go to and where we wanted to go to lunch all figured out.
First stop, A.C. Moore, because we are both craft junkies. What I never
realized was that upon entering that store, things would never be the same
between Liz and I. Within minutes of being in the store I received a call from
Liz’s mom that her dad had been shot in the head and was not going to make it.
This is fine so far as it goes, but it stops short. The writer needs to let the reader know that there are going to be three reasons for something given. The first intro gives us that or hints at it anyway. Here we have no idea: three reasons for the shooting is what it seems to suggest is coming.
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